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Behind the Scenes: Dialogue by markcrilley Behind the Scenes: Dialogue by markcrilley
I thought folks might enjoy seeing a small sample of dialogue writing--and rewriting--from Miki Falls. As is often the case, you'll see that there are even a few more changes between the rewritten dialogue and what ended up in the final book.

Often changes are made at the request of the editor, but in this case all the changes were my own: I guess I was trying to get all the humor I could out of this cheerful truck driver's one-and-only appearance in the series...
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ShootingStarla Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Thank you for sharing this with us :)
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xalicesmileyfacex Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
I think it worked really well x
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peacenluv10101 Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Heres what i do, if your using a pencil you take the eraser and lightly make streaks with it across the windsheild ;)
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MorganMeryl Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2010   Digital Artist
I really like the newspaper comic -style quality your manga, at least in this case has. It's really unique and lovely, it kind of brings feelings of nostalgia, like this is what happened long ago, and one of those three are remembering it, or something.
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Senn-Zado Featured By Owner May 15, 2009
awesome panel
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x-Silver-Starlight-x Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2009  Hobbyist
She's either in love or a nutcase....or both!

Personally, I vote both!
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johannady2 Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2008  Hobbyist Digital Artist
i think it worked....
i have a similar problem drawing transparent things...
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InspirationDruid26 Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2008
Haha...one of my favorite lines from Winter. xD However insignificant, I still love it lots! :heart:
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hazonku Featured By Owner May 1, 2008
Not really sure it worked? Um I got it right away. I think the light on the windshield look is about as perfect as it'll get for your art style & this is one panel I really like more than some others in Winter. This is just one of the panels that I can appreciate more than others for the artistic value.
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SakuraSadameWingz Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2008
Wow. That's really interesting.
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Pride666 Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2008
wow. i would never have enough patience to do that! OwO
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dragonball--gt4435 Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2008   Writer
One and only appearance?

Man, that sucks for that guy to make only one appearance!
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himeko12 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2008
THe dialogue sounds like how people talk in those movies especially the middle aged man in the middle...
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yaniguchi Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
The dialogue is written well, and it feels normal when you read it out loud!! I love it!
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RealDandy Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2008   Digital Artist
Awww...love your art as usual!!!:hear:
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Tenjilover Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2008
Had a tough time with that I see. XD
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Kitsune-juusan Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2008
i think teh light effec t came out good!
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Obi-quiet Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2008
I really appreciate this...thank you, seriously.
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littledinosaurarms Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2008
I like seeing these making-of shots. The process is as fascinating as the finished work. I like this character.
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gongagoo Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2008
Nice, Miki's chin doesn't bother me anymore. You did a great job on the driver, and the dialogue is, now that you actually bring it out, fluent.
Great job again, Mike.
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The-Kitty-Alchemist Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2008
it's a great idea for you to bring him out! it gives you a nice feeling reading about a character like that, especially with everything else that must be going on in the book, if you know what i mean

can't wait for the final book to come in stores! so excited!
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Milky-Heart Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2008  Student Artist
wow nice job^^
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Zoge Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
I can not WAIT until my books come-- Amazon says they should be at my house around the 18th! Thats SO far away!

Seeing the process, especially at the speed you preformed it makes it all the more amazing to me.

I'm not entirely sure on the intended setting of the truck to critique the light reflection-- if they're on an open road that lacks trees, the way you did it makes sense. If the road has a dense tree-line, around the top and to the far left dark spots suggesting treeish shapes may have added more of a dimension? I don't know how good this would actually look, I'm just trying to recall all those car commercials with the fancy cars driving on the mountain trails and through the whimsical meadows.

What you've done gets your point across, and helps to illustrate the scene rather than just framing the frame with car parts and saying, "HI THIS IS CAR PLZ U CN PRETUND RYT?"

The windshield isn't what my eye at least is drawn to anyway-- my eyes start at the gap in the drivers teeth, his balding head and his fuzzy dice, which gives him a kind of dorky voice in my head. :P
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hinoraito Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2008  Professional Digital Artist
aaww... The light in the windshield works fine I think... althought maybe (just maybe) could have used just a bit more reflection... but I dont know if that would have taken away from the characters

I love it! I'm happy to see what work goes on with the text... always wondered how comic artist would do this
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TechnoColorGraphic Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2008
Your an Amazing artist, I really want to read your books

[[if only i wasnt so poor]]

*needs to get a job*

anyway

keep on rocking dude

and ill keep on watching you do it!
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TasBlue Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2008  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
still gotta buy this!
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charmed-dog-demon Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2008
ah, the light effect works, very lovely! :) yes she must be either in love or a nutcase. :lmao:
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NekoShiney Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2008
The effect really worked. I love that panel, the effects in all. The poses too.
I thought you were good enough, but you've improved even more!
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Noolin Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2008  Student Filmographer
y'know what? i really really cant wait to read this!
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KamouriKing Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2008  Professional Traditional Artist
Awesome. I think writing it out is the hardist part.
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:iconcatgirlcrystlenya011:
WOW ALOT OF WORK TO DOON DIALOGUES HUH? *DONT MIND CAPS* LOVE UR WORK!!!!IM GUNNA BYE MIKI FALLS DEFINETx3
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FluffyShin Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
wooow..I guess it truly is a lot of work when it comes to writing a manga, and it takes a looooooooot of patience.
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Tmk09 Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2008  Student General Artist
hey mr.crilley when is ur next tutorial vid coming out!?!?!?!?
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Kenishik Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2008
Hehe, nice work mark, keep it up :D
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